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Core of the Apple -Part 1 by NaterRang Core of the Apple -Part 1 by NaterRang
Part 2: [link]

Finally it's up!

This has been the culmination of a project months in the making! (Though it's also a project that should've been finished a months ago. ^^; )

As is mentioned in the title this is part 1 of a 2 part story.

-I hesitate to mention this but, for those offering critique I must make a clarification; This has been a project months in the making. I'm not asking you to hold back or pull punches, rather just be aware that my art has improved since I originally sketched this thing out. Please take a look at one or two of my other recent pictures before you tailor your advice based on this picture alone. ;)

-Anyway hope you guys enjoy! :iconapplejackplz:

Be sure to check out the Comic Dub, once again provided by :iconobabscribbler: !

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Okay so here goes a Critique :D

Okay so im gonna start of with the impact this picture has then i will go onto the drawings themselves

First i wanna say Aj and Ab are perfectly in character for example, Applebloom acts like a typical kid would; Thinking what she is upset about is stupid ect
and applejack is being the typical loving sister trying to stay strong but eventually her own feelings take over which is what i feel would actually happen if this where a real situation

Okay now the topic of the comic is a mature one that me and allot of people wish would actually happen- Mainly because it would make for a very mature lesson, also it would be better than her parents suddenly appearing in S3, so this is why fan-art is always a nice thing to see, Plus your comic is handling the situation in a great way almost like the show would.

okay on to the drawing, first of i wanna say your drawing skills are amazing! some of the poses you have accomplished are really hard ones and you have done them perfectly, Also your shading is very accurate :D

Overall this is an amazing comic and i can't wait for more :D
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Excellent work. While many bronies have discussed and done various pieces of artwork about the Apple family's lack of parents, this comic strip here did it extremely well, citing a very good episode for the topic (Family Appreciation Day,) and giving a legitimate reason as to why Applebloom might be upset. Having Applejack coming in to comfort her younger sister almost always works, and the dialogue felt very natural, flowing, and realistic, it seems like something a real child in that particular position might say. The art work was fairly simple, but in this case it worked. The background art being too complex might have actually subtracted from the impact of the dialogue and situation. The only real criticism I have with the art is that in the last panel, Applejack's legs kind of look like really long feet. Also, there's no real resolution, but you said this is 1/2, so I'm not going to criticize you on that because you obviously aren't finished. I also love Applejack's character enough, she appears more heartwarming than usual but isn't out of character from herself on the show. All and all, an amzing piece of work, and you sir/madam (sorry, it's a little hard to tell on the internet,) deserve an award.
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:icondanielbenner214:
DanielBenner214 Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2015
Congrats, honestly, I hope this comic gets finished. It did something that I can't seem to do often, it made me cry.
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:iconsunpowah88:
SunPowah88 Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2015
What a nice, sweet, sad, and heartbreaking comic. Cry run 
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:iconmariomario9090:
MarioMario9090 Featured By Owner May 28, 2015  Student Photographer
Spike:*sees them* applebloom you ok
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:icondeadx555:
DEADX555 Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2015
The most saddest story of all time in mlp
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:icontransformers901:
transformers901 Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2015  Hobbyist Artist
this always pulls at my heart strings Sad Pony  it's also very well made Ene (Smile) [V7] 
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:iconriridacookiekiller:
RiriDaCookieKiller Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2014  Student
Hi I was wondering if I can do a dub of this please
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:icononepiecelover555:
OnePieceLover555 Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2014
feels!!!!!!!! Cry forever 
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:iconcaballero-nocturno:
caballero-nocturno Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2014
Awww :c
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:icondungeonbrony:
DungeonBrony Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I found the animated version of this and enjoyed it a lot... really gave me feels!

For me this kind of story is really important. The characters are... like us. They struggle like we do.

I really love that artists like you can use the MLP world to create experiences we can share and connect with.
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PyramidHead90 Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2014
Ah don't worry about it Apple Bloom.  You didn't miss out on anything.  Your parents were morons, and the most interesting thing they ever did was die in that septic tank explosion.
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:iconbronyofequestria142:
BronyOfEquestria142 Featured By Owner Aug 28, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Sooooo many feels!!!!!
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:iconflairthedark:
FlairTheDark Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2014  Student Artist
*sniff* so heartfelt...
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:iconmrbishop92:
mrbishop92 Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2014
aahh dude my heart cant stop the feels


stay classy
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:iconkone5497:
Kone5497 Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
dawww. this makes even me cry. :( so cute story.
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:iconnightgazer-starlight:
Never get the chance eh?

Hmmm...

I think this is one little filly that's in need of a Doctor and his blue box.
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:iconshadeokothedarkwolf:
shadeokothedarkwolf Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2014  Student Digital Artist
i would feel the same way......
stormfire: you have no idea slate..........
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:iconsarafina2012:
Sarafina2012 Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Sad Pony 
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:iconbaconlover13:
BaconLover13 Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2014
I-I am not crying! I'm sweating out of my eyes.
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:iconsarafina2012:
Sarafina2012 Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Of course you are...
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:iconnyxtheflyingkatfish:
NyxTheFlyingKatFish Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2014  Student General Artist
good job... *sniff*
you made me cry...
it was just so beautiful...
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:iconbluemoonlightheart:
BlueMoonlightHeart Featured By Owner May 30, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I-i'm not crying! J-just got a dust in my eye...
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DracoDei Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
A technical recommendation:

Best to edit in links to all existent pages as you publish them, or else change the link from "Part 2" to "Next". In either case, all pages should still contain a link to this first page.
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:iconprincessmchi:
PrincessMcHi Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2014
Then...
*sniff*
I started crying....
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:iconhomefanfic877:
homefanfic877 Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2014  Student Artist
the feels!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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:iconsesshomaru431:
Sesshomaru431 Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2014
This is the first time I've cried while reading a comic and the Comic Dub just made me cry harder! Just... omg this is both beautiful and sad.
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:iconwinter-crystal-yt:
Winter-Crystal-YT Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2014  Student Digital Artist
i feel ya. i never cry when reading or watching something. but this brought out floods.
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:iconsesshomaru431:
Sesshomaru431 Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2014
Indeed so!
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:iconjlafalcon:
jlafalcon Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2014
HHHHHHNNNNNNNNN!!!!!! THEM FEELS BRO!!! THEM FEEEEEEEEEEEELS!!!!!!!!!!
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:icontunder2510:
Tunder2510 Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Aww, Apple Bloom... :'(
I wish i could hug her!
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:iconunicorn-skydancer08:
unicorn-skydancer08 Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2014
Very heartfelt. That's all I can find to say.
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:iconxxshatteredworld92xx:
Xxshatteredworld92xX Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:iconthefeelsplz: :iconcryforeverplz:
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:iconjennjou15:
Jennjou15 Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2014
oh! poor little Bloom.
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:iconsparking-moonlight:
Sparking-moonlight Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2014
This story is beautiful and I enjoyed it
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:iconrainbowrules:
rainbowrules Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I cried when I read all of your comics. They are amazing and so emotional. The third one really hit me. It was so sad...
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Eli-J-Brony Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2014
I saw the video on YouTube. I commented on Part 4 about how sad it was for Applejack to loose her parents. I know how it feels to lose a family member. Both my grandpas were dead before I was born and I was lie, IDK, maybe 4 when my grandmas died. I only remember my mother's side grandmother. But not very well though. :(

I also lost an Aunt in 2012. Everyone in my family was sad, but I think her close family members like my mother, who was sisters with her were sad the most.
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SophiaKawaii Featured By Owner Dec 25, 2013  Student General Artist
Can't read anything
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:iconnaterrang:
NaterRang Featured By Owner Dec 25, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Oh? You know you have to click on the image to zoom in.
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:iconsophiakawaii:
SophiaKawaii Featured By Owner Dec 26, 2013  Student General Artist
I know, but when i click the image disappear
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:iconnaterrang:
NaterRang Featured By Owner Dec 26, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
You could always try clicking the download link. Or just watch one of the linked comic dubs.
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SophiaKawaii Featured By Owner Dec 26, 2013  Student General Artist
I tried clicking download, but it still didn't worked.
And the comic dubs ain't the same thing, they cut a lot of the panel and i prefer reading.
But still, thanks.
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:iconnaterrang:
NaterRang Featured By Owner Dec 26, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Sorry about that, maybe try a different browser?
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:iconsophiakawaii:
SophiaKawaii Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2013  Student General Artist
It worked, thanks!
I feel so dumb right now.
And the comic made me cry
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:iconlightningboltsuprise:
LightningBoltSuprise Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2014  Student Artist
we all cried. (I think)
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:icontinytoon70:
Tinytoon70 Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2013
oh man...*gives Appleblom a hug* :(
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:iconhordaks-pupil:
Hordaks-Pupil Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Poor Apple Bloom I hope AJ can cheer her up
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:iconairsoftbronydude:
Airsoftbronydude Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2013
i wonder how much of the class enjoyed those cookies 
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:iconponygalz:
PonyGalz Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2013
Right in the feels :iconthefeelsplz:
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:iconrekatheamazingtaco:
RekaTheAmazingTaco Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2013
Never has a comic about ANYTHING made me have a breakdown.

I feel so depressed now.
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MLPegasis4898 Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist

This made me cry for real... it's so sad... :cries:

Amazing job! You really get me the feels...

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thegrimreaper123 Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2013
Damn that's deep 
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