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Congratulations by NaterRang Congratulations by NaterRang
When loyalty is divided, can there be any outcome but tears?

Is this where the story ends?

Or is this the start of something more?

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This comic was written and conceived immediately after "Sleepless in Ponyville aired. A little late- yes, but still relevant.

<Edit> Sweet! :iconobabscribbler: has once again provided an awesome dub for one of my comics! Check it out here: www.youtube.com/watch?v=JNZGVI…
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Truly heart touching. I felt as if my own heart was breaking at the sight of crying Scootaloo. When my brother went to college, it shattered my heart, this made the memory come back. This took true talent and thought to make. The artwork is fantastic, better than what I can draw, and the mood is at first cheerful, then drops to a heart-crackeling scene. I nearly just broke into tears. It was my dearest pleasure to write this critique, thankyou for making such a beautiful comic.(Really, thank you sooooo much for making this!! Its beautiful!! Thank you once again)
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I really enjoyed this i thought it was very life-like i think you should make sequel to this comic. I loved the way you also did the art that was fantastic and had wonderful details i almost cried on this piece of work it was very touching to the heart i love art like this when people take their time to do something good. The originality was also wonderful so was the impact i thought no one could do any better i thought this was a wonderful piece of artwork probably my favorite out of all the comics. thanks for sharing :3
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jedipat Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2015
That's actually kind of sad. Poor Scootaloo.
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Derp-Puppy Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2015  Student Traditional Artist
ouch ;3;
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anti-logik Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2015
The story you've written is very good, otherwise it wouldn't have affected me so hard. However, I hate stories that are sad for the sake of being sad, especially when there's an obvious way to get a happy ending. I hope you don't mind me providing one.


As Scootaloo ran away, Rainbow Dash looked on in shock, and felt a stabbing pain in her heart. She'd been so excited she'd forgotten what it would mean to the little orange filly. Her first impulse was to fly after her, but what could she say? That she'd give up her dreams for Scootaloo? Well, yes, if there was no other way, it was no more than she'd done back when they were searching for the Elements of Harmony, even if that was a fake. But if only there was another way.

She turned to the others and pleaded, "Guys, you have to help me figure out a way to fix this! I can't abandon Scootaloo, not after I promised her I'd be there for her! But this is my big chance! Maybe I can get them to delay while I get Scoots up to speed, but entry to the Academy is very tightly controlled. I won't abandon Scootaloo if it comes down to it, but I need to figure out if there's a way we can both get what we want."

Twilight frowned in thought. "Maybe there is. Spike!? I need you to send some letters!"

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Scootaloo was slumped in the corner of the CMC treehouse, eyes streaked and throat raw from sobbing. Her eyes were dry now simply from running out of tears. She heard a gentle knock, and a familiar voice called out, "Scoots? Are you in there?"

Right now the last person she wanted to see was Rainbow Dash. "Go away!"

"Uh uh Scoots, that's the one thing I can't do. I was so excited about getting in, I forgot about you for a moment, but only for a moment."

"But you're going off to the Academy, going to live in Cloudsdale for ever and ever!"

"The training course is only a month long, but you're right that that's too long, especially after I promised you I'd be there for you. So, if you want, I'll refuse. They'll just have to wait to see my awesomeness."

Scootaloo didn't remember bouncing to her feet, or dashing across to open the door, But she must have done because she was suddenly hugging Rainbow Dash tightly, her wings reaching forward to try and enfold her as Rainbow Dash's wings were doing to her. She was about to say 'Yes!', but then she looked up into Rainbow Dash's eyes. There was determination there, and sorrow. She thought about what she'd heard about how hard it was to get into the Wonderbolts Academy, and realised Dash might be giving up a lot more than just delaying her training.

Could she really ask Dash to possibly give up her dream for ever just because Scootaloo would lose her for a month? Sisters caed for each other, and that went both ways, like Apple Bloom and Applejack, or Rarity and Sweetie Belle. In situations like this, she'd normally ask herself, 'What would Rainbow Dash do?' except that she'd just been shown exactly what her mentor would do in such a case.

She gulped down a lump that had formed in her throat, sat back on her haunches, and sniffed. "No, it's okay Rainbow Dash, it's only for a month, right? And when you get back, you'll have all sorts of new awesomeness to show me!"

"I sure will, squirt." Rainbow Dash hugged her again. "But if Twilight comes through, maybe it won't be a month..."

There was a teleport flash, and Twilight appeared at the bottom of the treehouse ramp, holding a sheaf of papers in her hirn's grip. "It's been endorsed! Both Princess Celestia and Princess Luna signed off on it, which means no-one is going to argue. In fact, Princess Luna was even more behind it than Princess Celestia! I've talked to Scootaloo's parents, and they've okayed it. Miss Cheerilee is on board too."

Rainbow Dash reverse punched the air. "Yes! Thanks Twilight, you're awesome!"

Scootaloo looked confused. "What's going on?"

"If it's what Twilight came up with, you, on a flying chariot to the Wonderbolt Academy. One of the Royal ones, so they'll get you there fast! You get to spend two days a week there, and the other five in Ponyville. Of course, you have to keep up your grades at school, and I can't be able to be there for you full time at the Academy, but I should be able to spend my free time with you. And we'll have access to the best training facilities and instructors in Equestria!"

"Really!" Scootaloo's eyes were so wide you could use them as landing reflectors.

"Really truly." Rainbow Dash hugged her again. "I said I'd take you under my wing, and I don't leave any-pony hanging, especially my little sister."

Scootaloo leaned into the hug and was crying again, but this time because she was happy.
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NaterRang Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2015  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thanks for the suggestion. :)

However, you do realize there is a second part to this comic?
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anti-logik Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2015
No I didn't. There's no link or anything.
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NaterRang Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2015  Hobbyist Digital Artist
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mindfreak71819 Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2014
screw you rd; how dare you break scootaloo's heart
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FoxyAmatroniac Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2015  Student Artist
Theres a part 2
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mindfreak71819 Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2015
I just saw it; thanx
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FoxyAmatroniac Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2015  Student Artist
Cute Foxy Plushie Chat Icon 
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MLPRocks190 Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2014
HNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNGG!
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PyramidHead90 Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2014
I think i'll finish Rainbow Dash's statement since the last panel is missing.

"Who the hell was that kid?"
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Oldmonkey333 Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2014  Hobbyist Artist
Aww....................
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SugarCookie310 Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2014
:iconfplz::iconeplz::iconeplz::iconlplz::iconsplz: :iconcryforeverplz:
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CraftyMaelyss Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2014  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
icon: Spyro Dat Ass or cool Spro "Press the X button twice to glide."
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poop556 Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2014  Student Digital Artist
:icontplz: :iconhplz: :iconeplz:     :iconfplz: :iconeplz: :iconeplz: :iconlplz: :iconsplz:
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o0Airheart0o Featured By Owner May 7, 2014
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ArtofTreasure99 Featured By Owner May 4, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I can't take it anymore....gonna cry! This is amazing (and sad :( )
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Derpywhooves109w Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2014
does it end here I cant
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NaterRang Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
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templar127 Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2013
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16labonj Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2013
Come on! We need this continued! Make more! Please!
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NaterRang Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Quite the coincidence. Part 2 will be up in a day or two.
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princessprt Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
oh boy rainbow dash you really screwed up....
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MuddyFudger Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
How? Its not her fault that she was accepted into the academy right after she made a promise. She didn't screw up, she got screwed over.
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princessprt Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
yes
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KoboldCleaver Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2013
Well that's awful depressing as-is.
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alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2013
Discord, "There is nothing sweeter than the sound of a pony's heart cracking in two."
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Pancakestheartist123 Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2013  Student Digital Artist
You must make more of dis
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LouderSpeakers Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Well.. I don't think Scootaloo would cry in a situation like this.. Join the Wonderbolts was the biggest dream of Rainbow Dash! I don't believe Scoot were that selfish to do that. She would be happy for her, no only thinking about her. 
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NaterRang Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Still, keep in mind:

A) Scootaloo is a little kid, so she may not rationalize an event the same way an adult would.

B) Her idol and newly christened big sister is moving away. Being a small kid, (especially one that can't fly) she probably lacks the resources to visit Rainbow dash in Cloudsdale on a regular basis anyway.
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Applejack2011 Featured By Owner Oct 24, 2013
More!
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buzzybeetle95 Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2013
THERE NEEDS TO BE MORE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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huntercat111 Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2013
i think this can be a comic
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TotallyNotCookie Featured By Owner Sep 20, 2013
I love this... w-will there be more? I-I need another part!!!!
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EternalFriendship Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2013
part 2  would be cool
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starlightforever Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2013  Student Artist
More please :)
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Fire--Bolt Featured By Owner Sep 9, 2013  Student Digital Artist
tear overflow

help

my tears will never run out
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Red-Zan Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2013
Noh! ...my heart T_T
poor scoots, nice comic since it hits them heartstrings.
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DrX-Raven Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2013
*Dr. X*: *Sighs heavily* Division of loyalty and desires....... There are many consequences.....

*Raven*: www.youtube.com/watch?v=K0QHw7… ...... Sequel?
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Mylittlesonic245 Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Poor scootaloo R.D probaly feels bad now
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ccblackmaiden45 Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2013  Student Artist
ahahaha 
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JennieThePoorFilly Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2013
Mmmmph! I want to cuddle her and say it's alright! T~T
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sweetymimy22 Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2013
please say not this is the end  
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CrystalMuffin Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
www.youtube.com/watch?v=EZspd8…
i did a comic dub for this :3
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Tonypilot Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2013
Shouldn't you be making one with Rainbow Dash trying to Comfort Scootaloo
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eeveefan0121 Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Loved it! :D Now, I haven't read the other comments but you did leave out AJ's freckles. Sorry if someone already pointed that out. 
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NaterRang Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Gosh-Darn it!
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eeveefan0121 Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Sorry. XD
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